Drive along the coastal road
Sitting by your side
Lonely flight
On a full moon night
You were very kind
Even when I lied
Made our life better place
Saved every wage pace
Even in your worse times
You never showed any face
you took care like a Nurse
In maternity Church with an empty Purse
Back were those days
I like this; not quite bout rimes where the given words are meant to be at the end of your lines, but so what! You've taken the prompt and made it your own ... and I applaud that ... smiles
ReplyDeletesounds like they were good people to care so much no matter what...
ReplyDeleteyou could make this fit, breaking the lines at the words....
nice to have someone caring like this...even when you lied to him...that is when many would stop...
ReplyDeletesweet and loving.. a great comeback of caring.
ReplyDeleteInteresting piece. Rather ambiguous but not the worse for it. Surprised the way you used the words. I thought it must have been about a parent.
ReplyDeletenicely done, even if you did cheat a bit :-) (that's not always a bad thing!!)
ReplyDeleteLovely write though you didn't use the rhymes very conventionally, still a excellent read :)
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